"It started on a nice summer afternoon, I was playing Sonic Unleashed (I liked how you get to explore the towns in it)". I don't know why he had to say that in parentheses, let alone say that at all. Until I noticed, out of my peripheral vision, that the mailman had arrived and put something in my mail box as usual and left." Well, it certainly is unusual for the mailman to stick around.
"I paused my game to go see what I got in the mail... The only thing in the mailbox was a CD case for computers and a note." I am guessing this is a bit nitpicky, but why couldn't Tom have said " a computer disc" or "CD Rom" or anything besides "CD case for computers". Tom looked at the note and realized it was his friend Kyle. He recognized his hand writin…Read more >