Im Luis Alvarez better known by my alias Lord Astaroth.I wanted to bring you this story is not well written nor is the full thing is just events that are gonna happen and I want people to help me with constructive critics so I can get better at writting horror stories since this is my first.
The story tells of a dad and his son that moved to Kansas for a new begginning because of a tragedy his wife had a car accident for a unknown reason nobody found who or what did it just her dead corpse in the car.Everything was normal in the house just that in his son's room in the dark a malevolent being resided there torturing the boy with nightmares and sometimes the boy saw in the dark a girl with long black hair that reached her shoulders,a white dress tainted in blood and this smile from ear to ear it freaked the boy to the point he went insane.The father noticed things strange not only that his little boy was very diferrent he didn't even talked to him like he was scared but he notice at night he felt a cold dead presence coming from his child room,hearing laughter in the hallways and metal banging like someone was tempting him to look outside everytime he did he didnt saw anything he was scared he coudnt explain all this things he decided to contact a psychic to see if there was something in the house.When the psychic arrived just entering the doorstep he felt this presence so evil he just coudnt believe it he said to the dad "there is a precense here I cant describe but its surely very twisted and evil i can feel his urge for your corpses"the father was in shock his little boy was traumatized by this being sent from hell to destroy his family how could he not notice it sooner.They went room to room sensing the precense and putting special herbs and saying chants to clean the room from the presence until they did it in all the house.Of course the dad ans psychic was happy and the psychic left the house saying "if this doesnt do it call me fast we need to deal with this quickly before its too late" the father said "okay" and shut the door.The day ended and was night all day it was a very calm and peaceful day even at night they both felt secured but they were wrong they only angered it more now its coming for them.
well its not complete its just mostly the order im gonna add alot more but please help me get better at writting and please give a constructive critic not just critics like it sucks or whatever its my first pasta i hope you like it