Ah, the Jeff Formula. It's so devoid of effort and originality, and leads to such homogeneous characters. Like the Bloody Painter, for example. Don't believe me? Well, let's get drawing, and Riff this bitch so I can prove it.
This is Helen, 14 years old.
Can we have a 15 year old Jeff knockoff? Please? Just to do something different?
His dark circles
Wait, he? Helen’s a guy? His parents must really hate him if they name him Helen.
feel as if he has never slept enough. He doesn't care about his messy black hair, since he doesn't like to put too much effort on tidying himself up; it’s unnecessary.
I’m probably going to be saying the same about this story later.
His seat is at the back of the classroom, next to the window; he always sits there drawing quietly, as it is like everything to him. He doesn't like to socialize with people, making him a lonely one.
“The Lonely One,” coming soon from Lifetime.
There was a person being pushed to the floor after school.
That’s Tom, who is always the victim of bullying, not because he did anything before, it’s just the dislikes of people around him. These things happen often, and Helen is used to it. Though he does feel bad for Tom, he doesn't want to interfere, as it is quite bothersome.
Screw helping people! That’s just bothersome.
During recess, Judy
Who the hell is Judy?
says she’s missing her watch as she searches for it. Helen doesn't help her, since it’s none of his business.
Suddenly, someone sees something flashing in Helen’s bag. “What’s this?”
(Helen): The souls of the innocent.
Ban says, as he puts his hand into the bag, and takes out a watch that is trimmed with fake diamonds. Helen is very surprised to see it, as he does not know how it got there. “Ah! That’s my watch!” Judy receives the watch from Ban after seeing the situation. Both of them stare at Helen with a weird glare. “It’s not me,” says Helen, who is still drawing on his notebook without raising his head a bit. “Yeah right,” Judy leaves the classroom with Ban as she concludes.
Silly question time: Who is Ban, and what kind of name is Ban? It’s almost as stupid as Liu.
The following day, as usual, Helen sits at his table drawing. She
Ok, can Helen make up his/her mind about his/her gender?
notices that the atmosphere doesn't feel right around him; people start whispering about him, and even a few starts calling him a “Thief”. He decides not to explain for himself, as he knows that it’s useless to do so. As time passes, Helen becomes the new target or victim for people to bully; everything he does now is being exaggerated.
(Helen): -stands up-
(Bully): That asshole’s standing up! He’s going to take over the school!
He doesn't like it, but he doesn't resist. He keeps the feelings in his heart, keeping silent. Until one day, Ban came to him and snatched his notebook, with his unfinished drawings on it. “Always doing these meaningless things.” Says Ban as he tears down a few pages of drawings, tearing them into pieces, wanting to see Helen’s reaction. At this rate, the feelings that he has been holding bursts out. He punches Ban in the face,
and starts the fight. Helen isn't that powerful however, so he was beaten up in no time. Other students went to see the fight, without stopping it; some people even stomped him in his face and stomach.
Well, at least he isn't overpowered like Jeff.
Right after the bell rings, everyone stops what they're doing and went back to their seats before the teacher came. Helen returned to his seat, as if nothing happened. The teacher enters the room later on, “Oh my, Helen! What happened?” Helen has so many visible bruises on him that the teacher notices right after he enters the room. Everybody turns to look at him, waiting for him to give a response while glaring at him with a murderous look.
And the teacher, of course, doesn’t notice this.
“I fell from the stairs, Miss.” Helen replies as the glares disappear. After returning home from school, his parents also ask him what happened, and he responds with the same answer. The blue jacket he is wearing covers all of the bruises other than those on his face. His parents believe it without doubts.
(Narrator): …because every adult is an idiot in this story.
Usually, when Helen’s parents ask him about how he is at school, he always says he’s fine. He even lied about making a lot of friends, living happily every day. Helen refuses to tell his parents the truth, since he doesn't want to make his parents worry about him.
A few months later, he has gotten used to the negative comments about him, and getting hit or humiliated has been a normal event for him; he is completely immune to these things now. Who framed him in the first place? Why did the culprit do this? This doesn’t matter anymore. Nothing matters anymore now. “Hi! You there?” Helen receives a message from an unknown user on Facebook. “Who're you?” He replies.
(Person): What, are you dense? Are you retarded or something? Who the hell do you think I am? I’m the goddamn Batman!
“I’m Tom, your classmate.”
I’d much prefer if that were Batman.
Tom has never interacted with him before. This surprised him a bit. “What is it?” Helen says. “Um… are you alright?” “It’s none of your business.” Helen concludes Tom’s question. Tom types for a while before coming up with, “Listen, I know how u feel right now. You’re in the same situation as I am. I really want to help u, but I can’t… sorry.” Afterwards, Tom and Helen text each other for a long time, and Helen feels much better after telling him all the pain and feelings he has been through.
…they’re going to fall in love, aren’t they?
He can even joke around with Tom, often using “ : )” to show his happiness. This is the first time he thinks he has made a friend. It is a warm weather in the afternoon. “Come meet me on the roof after the first period in the afternoon. We need to talk, don’t ask me why.” texted Tom last night. Following his instructions, Helen meets Tom on the roof, waving his hand and walking towards him, saying “Hey Tom! What’s up, friend?”
“Um… I have something to say…something important…” says Tom with a serious face.
(Tom): I’m pregnant, and you’re the father!
“Remember the watch thieving incident?” How could Helen forget about it? That was how he started suffering! Helen nods to show he remembers.
“I was the culprit!” Tom looked down, scared to look into his eyes.
“WHAT?!” Helen was shocked.
“I stole Judy’s watch and framed you as the culprit.”
“Why did you do this?”
“With you as the new target of victim, my life is much better.” Tom smirks.
So you tell him this on the roof because…?
It’s true however that, when everybody decides to bully Helen, they won’t bother Tom anymore. He’s just like an abandoned toy. For him that is totally perfect. As long as he keeps silent he will be able to live his school life safe and sound. He succeeded; the plan was outstandingly perfect. Helen grabs the collar of his shirt, and, after pushing around a bit, they ended up near the edge of the roof. Tom slips and falls from the roof. Helen instantly grabs his hand, and tries to pull him back up, but Helen does not have that much strength to do so.
“I’m so sorry, Helen.” Tom falls.
Tom’s perfect plan, everyone!
Helen closes his eyes, scared to look at what’s going to happen. He cannot imagine what will happen to one after falling from a 6 story tall building. After the policemen arrive, they have an interview with Helen. He was too horrified by the accident, however, to say even a word. Once again, Helen becomes the topic of discussion between students.
Some people thought Helen pushed Tom from the roof, but most of the others think that Tom committed suicide, and Helen failed saving him, because they saw him grabbing Tom’s hand before he fell. That night, Helen was in his room crying, shivering, and he cannot stop the guiltiness form that is growing inside of her. He needed to calm down. Suddenly, a thought flashed in his mind: “It’s not my fault that Tom died. He deserved to die!” This made him feel much better, and his guilt began to fade away, too. Helen creepily smiles, “Tom has had his punishment… I suppose it’s time for others to have theirs, isn’t it?” His cries turn into laughter in the dark.
(Narrator): And thus Helen became known as the Spanker.
Helen’s classmates decide to have a party on the day of Halloween, but it’s not to celebrate Halloween,
(Narrator): …it’s to worship Satan.
it’s just to have their friends come together to party. Of course, Helen was not invited to the party. The night before the day of Halloween Judy and Maggie were texting each other on Facebook. Both of them live in the school dorm, and Judy’s room is next to Maggie’s.
09:03 – Judy: who’s going to come on tomorrow’s party? I’m so excited : D
09:03 – Maggie: most of our class will be there. But I texted Ban so many times, and even though all the messages I sent are read, he just never replies to me. The hells wrong with him?
(Judy): Should I list it in alphabetical order?
09:04 – Judy: he’s probably working I guess
09:06 – Maggie: something weird is happening…I’ve been hearing footsteps coming from my door for a long time…I think someone’s walking around the dorm
09:06 – Maggie: wait, I’ll go check (Using the hole on the door, Maggie saw something unusual…)
09:07 – Maggie: o my god!! there’s a guy outside who’s wearing a mask and a blue jacket, and he’s holding a knife. and HES ALL BLOODY!!
(Maggie): And rather than run, I decided to text you!
09:07 – Maggie: f**k! he’s knocking my door now
09:08 – Maggie: oh god oh god oh god!!!!
09:08 – Judy: just calm down, and find a weapon or something
09:08 – Judy: protect yourself!
09:09 – Maggie: She’s turning the doorknob, good thing I locked it
I thought you said whatever was going to kill you was a he. Make up your damn mind.
09:09 – Maggie: I’m scared!!
09:09 – Judy: Maggie
09:09 – Maggie: what should I do?!
09:09 – Judy: Maggie, listen
(Judy): Listen while I text you!
09:09 – Maggie: SAVE ME!!
09:09 – Judy: Maggie, calm down
09:09 – Judy: Maggie
09:10 – Judy: Maggie?
09:10 – Judy: u there?
(Judy): Fine, if you won’t respond, I won’t respond.
The message is shown to be read, but Judy just doesn't see Maggie’s response. Suddenly Judy hears the sound of her room door opening. The instance she turns around, she feels a terrible pain on her stomach. A bloody person who is wearing a mask and a blue jacket bursts into the room and stabs her. That night, all of the students who were in the dorm were murdered. No one knows how that killer did it.
By stabbing them to death.
The murderer used the victims’ blood to paint on the walls of the dorm, with most of the paintings being the face “: )”. Many of the corpses were being chopped and mashed, possibly to get more “pigments”. Helen Otis,
Wow, he has a really stupid name.
the culprit, is still missing currently. However, in the chat room where Judy and Maggie texted each other, a message was written that respond to Judy’s first message at 09:03:
“11:15 – Judy: don’t be excited about tomorrow : )" because there will be no tomorrow .
(Helen): There is only Hump Day.
Well, that was pretty stupid. The plot was pretty cliché, the characters were just cardboard cutouts, the spelling and grammar weren't very good, and the story wasn't quite sure about the gender of the main character. Also, why was it called "Bloody Painter"? That name is never used in the story at all. Oh, whatever. There are a lot of other questions to be asked about this story that I really don't care enough to ask. All I'll say is that this story sucks.
So, what do you guys think? Was the story good? Was the Riff good? Do you wish the Bloody Painter would kill me? Leave your thoughts in the comments below.