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  • Just wondering.

    Hello.

    I am a pshycho maniac.

    Wanna hear my torturous crimes I performed on young women?

    "now, let's start."

    I made one go insane, tricking her into thinking she was a robot. She became "Anne Droyd".

    I tore one's heart out, and put them in a robot body. She became "Rin".

    I fused two best friends together. They became "Evelyn-Evelyn".

    I sliced into the back of one, and put cybernetics in them, turning them into "Fiora".

    I mutilated one, then made them a cyborg-"Mettaton".

    I tore one's eye out, then put a clock there. They are now "Clockwork".

    I removed one's limbs, then put cybernetics in them so they wouldn't bleed. They turned into "Pin".

    And guess what, female readers?

    "you're next".

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    • I included your story and I'll also point out the issues I listed on your talk page:

      Capitalization (""you're next".", "now, let's start.", etc.), punctuation ("now, let's start.", "you're next". Why, given the the story is delivered as a monologue, why are these lines in quotations?), spelling ("I am a pshycho maniac."), wording ("I tore one's heart out, and put them in a robot body.", "I tore one's (ones) eye out, then put a clock there.", etc.), and story issues (It's very rushed, feels more like plot points than an actual story, and violates our spinoff rules, as well as being pretty cliched (see last line and our cliche page)).

      Those were a majority of the reasons (although that is not all the issues present) why your story was deemed to not meet our quality standards.

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    • How does the title relate in any way to the pasta?

      The reason why this was removed was probably because of the lack of actual story. It's like something an internet troll would write on Facebook in 2012 to scare little children. Maybe if you actually wrote a narrative to go along with the ideas you've expressed in the pasta, it would be suitable, but not in its current state.

      Also, despite only being a few sentences long, it's got a few grammar and spelling issues.

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    • Just a Guy That Likes Creepypastas wrote:
      How does the title relate in any way to the pasta?

      The reason why this was removed was probably because of the lack of actual story. It's like something an internet troll would write on Facebook in 2012 to scare little children. Maybe if you actually wrote a narrative to go along with the ideas you've expressed in the pasta, it would be suitable, but not in its current state.

      Also, despite only being a few sentences long, it's got a few grammar and spelling issues.

      because the victims are turned into a bunch of pop culture refrences

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