I really like the card art. It's just a shame that it would be completely useless if it was used in an actual game. The story itself was quite good, but the ending just seemed random and cliched, which let it down a bit.
Tempest-Fennac 05:35, July 14, 2011 (UTC)
Blue-Eyed Shining Dragon should take care of that XD (That's the only thing I remember from my Yu-Gi-Oh phase haha). Good pasta overall though. Mr.Zalgopasta 00:48, July 15, 2011 (UTC)
I'm sorry, but the story was actually quite predictable and filled with cliche's. Though it's good if it's your first pasta. _kami__ KoЯn! 04:28, July 26, 2011 (UTC)
The story, while a bit generic, is pretty solid. Though you need to improve with the grammar, it doesn't flow to well, aside from that not bad at all. Bushcraft Medic 08:55, September 7, 2011 (UTC)
Being a serious Yugioh player myself (going to tournaments serious) I found this story very disappointing. I'm familiar with the site you used for custom cards, you didn't do a particularly bad job on the card. It just didn't look realistic. The card was no way tied into the story. You sir, are very misinformed on this subject. I suggest reading up a bit and redoing the entire thing. - Avenging Angel 20:22, January 6, 2012 (UTC)